
Is
progress always a good thing?
estimated score: 5.25/6.0:
Good ideas
and good development and support, but needs smoother transitions and more even
development. Some of the language and word choices are not quite right.
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The
nobleness & the use of progress in any field, to an individual, or to the
society on the whole, will depend on what use the progress is being put to, and
I feel, cannot be generalized as stated above.
One of the most common errors
is committed in this introduction--failure to restate the topic.
Progress
has been inherent with the human race. As the human brain developed, so has
progress been achieved, in almost all fields known to man....